Press Release
President Preston Parker, Social Media Club of Cache Valley (SMCCV)
1504 Lynnwood Ave.
Logan, UT 84341
661-772-7537
For Immediate Release: September 13, 2011
Cache Valley Learns About Social Media
A new club in the Valley offers education on the latest happenings in the social media world.
LOGAN, Utah – (Sept. 13, 2011) Social Media is a huge part of the twenty first century, luckily the people of Cache Valley have a new club in town to educate them on how to use social media outlets.
President Preston Parker, explained simply, “we are a friendly, open, nonthreatening group of social media users, excited to educate the people of Cache Valley on the benefits of social media.”
The Social Media Club of Cache Valley is hosting a “Tweet Up” tonight as one of their monthly meetings. The club was founded in August of 2009 as the second chapter in Utah following the Salt Lake City chapter.
The event is free and open to all.
Annie Jackson (twitter= anniegracej)
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I like how you were able to communicate some of the things the social media group incorporates in its meetings. Knowing the time crunch, maybe just whip the rest of it together and I think the LOGAN, Utah – (Sept. 13, 2011) needs to appear higher, but I know its just a draft anyway. :)
ReplyDeleteOk, here are a few mistakes I saw. The sub-head is too lengthy. It doesn't need (Sept. 13, 2011) in the dateline since you have it after for immediate release. The quote is not proper AP style. It's missing the boilerplate.
ReplyDeleteThat being said, you got more accomplished than i did so congrats! I'm sure all of the mistakes are due to a lack of time (I know mine are). Besides the few minor mistakes, I love the first paragraph and the general message you are sending! I can't wait to read your final draft because this is a great start.
I feel like there are definitely mistakes, but they can most likely be attributed to the fact that this was done VERY quickly. Overall I like it, I would just fix up the minor mistakes like Amanda noted and add more information about meetings, it's pretty short!
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